Later, and will probably get brought up again, but there isn't enough of an explanation for each message and where the magic actually came from. I think in MO's case it went through myrddin again, though there is something in Aety's perspective I can use -- them flying close to yellow branches.
Same deal with the purpose of having two separate maps. The original idea was getting trajectories but it seems like it would be useful for AX's spatiality warping too. Thelma should get the past positions of AX, so that their powers combined means the present positions. Fits the swells/tearsuns thing.
Uhhh why are the first sprouts sensing each others thoughts magically for the first time? Didn't they do that already? Make it more clear. Also I think the gradient happened with KIN too so use that one for inspiration.
I still have two explanations for swells in 28-1 and presumably 29-1. Need to fix. Actually this is complex and confusing, it looks like the second explanation both repeats *and* references the first one..WTF was I thinking? Idk see heavy analysis comment below.
The joining with swells in order to create magic thing doesn't make sense either. Also the magic comes from ax who is tied to all of the swells at once. I need to do deep analysis again.
It needs to be clear that the Fae generated the messages, and the siblings sending them out was part of the ritual. Also prayer plays a bigger role than it used to -- I think these are items for updating the climax and/or the ESCZR segments.
And the wild time travel shenanigans of the message in the first place was a *crucial* part of the Fae ritual, and possibly set up by them -- so indicate that somewhere. Maybe in the Inhatcheta segment, since it happens there too. The Kawan one possibly as well, or Sutap. Looks like it's also going to be heavily hinted in 19.
Why is the swells clue within Nonaxe? Totality? Oh it's the magic aspect of it. God I need to do heavy analysis on this.
If it doesn't break the pacing, the seven siblings should actually send out their message in that section, and how they get it to repeat and guide second sprouts and stuff.
Sutap's faith in chapter 29 here should be based on the idea that NK can do something about the second sprouts. Sending magic is already known by this point. Might still be a problem after the rewrite, might not.
I've done some work here, but I think part of what's happening is that Naggirps doing the Aety thing to change the life-branches gave everyone *way* more knowledge (Sutap seeing the totality of the Source Ygg for example). This should be important -- it's a way of working with infinities (Jadzia's power, and Q/T's eventual map, and the swells of course).
