Trim AX's plans. Axis voice is particularly hard to work with honestly, which might be part of the problem. Also some of axis sections aren't as clear as they could be.
My thinking here is I should write out separate versions for Xever and Aety and then merge them in whatever way feels best.
I need to look at Hayden to see if he or Xever are worth working on to differentiate themselves so Axe gets him too. Probably not, honestly. Although I could do some terminology stuff like "Winifred-associate", which cuts down a lot on the "mind" repetition.
Should do this process with Naggirps too, hence the mention.
Qadiryden as well, probably during the third draft on that one though since Qadira and Ryden both need voice work.
Default emotion for AX should be something crazy like trying to achieve apotheosis rather than relatability
I feel like the pronoun "axer" instead of "axim" fits better in some ways. Watch for partials like "aximself". No point doing this until the end of the AX rewrite project.
Consistent gryphon pronouns. Going to be different from character to character -- Kawan and chimerines and probably Ellis are going to use the right one. Jadzia too.
Make 8-K more emotional. Should probably just apply this to interior scenes in general, unless it's something like Barrett thinking. Could probably sideline these kinds of fixes until draft 3.
7-O needs to be longer. Same deal with my action scenes in general -- F&S did this right.
Consistent wording of "it" and "her" when referring to the Source Ygg, on a character by character basis. And obviously subject to change (Q and R come to mind)
