Consistent gryphon pronouns. Going to be different from character to character -- Kawan and chimerines and probably Ellis are going to use the right one. Raptorlet should probably be female as well. It literally is, it's a lioness. Whoops.
Francis got one of Xever's gryphons, but surely he'd have one of his own? Just needs explanation somewhere. Maybe in the section where he says he doesn't like leaving his city.
Make sure Myrddin being found surrounded by large amounts of gryphons is reflected in what the couriers say about him. Big plot point of Aety finding them and all.
Does Jadzia know Ryden's gryphon is named Leandro? Make sure it's consistent.
Saddles/reins. Seems to be easiest to just remove them. Possible issues with tamed/untamed gryphons too (and that's harder to fix)
How does gryphon training/untamed ones work? A bunch of characters ride them and there seems to be no downside.
Also armoring -- I mention plate armor for both men and gryphons in one of the Kawan vignettes.
Gryphon speed is another weird thing -- Raptorlet is slower (unless panicked) because it's physically weak, but gryphons aren't flying in a traditional sense.
How does gryphon riding work? Heels, tugs on manes, etc. need to figure this out.
I should really make it clear that vertical travel rotates the gryphon to face the sky -- this happens in Kawan's POV when going towards the tearsun, but I don't think it does with Jadzia. Also in Kawan's case, it's probably due to the speed of it pushing him back. Though that would be true with Jadzia too. Also check references to verticality elsewhere (the wild ygg or going up from Low to High Vastwood).
22-N should explain how Nonaxe understands how to fly a gryphon. Unless it's already covered by Jadzia/Zoelle. Obviously I also need to know *how* to fly one at this point.
Aquileo flipping upside down is weird since that's never used again. Make it zoom around or something instead. Also fix this after the verticality and gryphon flying fixes -- should be easier.
I do feel like the broodlions section should mention that the stock of gryphons myrddin had before was no good. Just handle it better than I did last time.
Jadzia getting a saddle in Rainshade makes the most sense. Provided that's how gryphons work, of course.
