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Posted June 13, 2026 by Xhin



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Another Task Dump.

  • More reminders that Zoelle teases Cuyler, particularly right before Cuyler's strong moment.

  • The revelation that the source Ygg is worth believing in comes from both Q and R so it should affect Q more than it is (maybe around her message)

  • How does Barrett know the stuff that happened at the Ashcroft house is Fae magic? If there's no good explanation for that, have Lionel point it out because of the green color. Or mention it earlier in Barrett's vignettes -- should be plenty of hooks for that.

  • Finally something that made sense" might be a plot hole now because of the Francis edit. Check the first draft's F vignettes for clues and possibly a fix.

  • Obviously, 25-C is important, but Ryden announces his faith to the source Ygg out of nowhere. There should be more buildup to it (also isn't he pretending to be Spriggan-sent?)

  • Obviously, Zoelle and Cuyler need to know that they'll be trading gryphons with Sutap and Ellis. I don't remember if Ryden said that or not.

  • Naggirps' thought on Valeska barrier (and her magic barrier) is wrong.

  • If Naggirps doesn't explore all seven branches again, then change it to "they *could* explore them again', not "they would'.

  • In the Nonaxe life-tree vignettes, say that each set of seven is sprouting from the trunk.

  • Thelma didn't see her city change color, though she did see a lot of red.

  • Same deal with the swell that Kawan brings to Faeheim later -- there should still be plant growth everywhere. Just not as bad as the swell at its peak.

  • Plot hole: and had retained her Primordial Ashnode for that exact reason. So, he led with that. Harder to fix too because it comes up when Valeska is angry.

  • Why was Zoelle spying on Qadira? Just needs an explanation somewhere. I'm thinking it's unrelated to George -- the eyes *are* the biggest importer of Zoelle's weapons. But this might screw up all that early foreshadowing (though then again it's long-game foreshadowing for Thelma thinking that Zoelle is a spy).

    • July 7, 2026
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    9-7+ Misc

  • Cuyler's interiority around the void does need to point out that her role has always been to be supportive, and something there is what makes her do sister things at last. Best opportunity is right after her saying that the others didn't care. If I cant do it here, delay until draft #3. Evidently can't do it in draft #3 either, though I do like the new direction of it. Maybe that's enough, or it'll create something better. I think she just needs more interiority in general about herself instead of her honeyan scattered around, and then it'll culminate in the Sister Cuyler moment.

    • September 7, 2026
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    9-27+ Misc

  • Jadzia doubts the Fae exist twice with Kawan. Look into it. Possibly fixed with one word added, but needs review.

    • September 29, 2026
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    Parallax

  • Somewhere in Qadiryden, use the word "parallax". See below note. "Depth perception" is probably what I'm looking for here.

  • Parallax doesn't mean what I think it means. I'm looking for a word here that means one image forming from two eyes.

  • Something in the Qadiryden area should use the word "parallax", since it's literally the first and second eyes bonding. Subtle would be better, but there's plenty of opportunities otherwise since this is metaphorically happening too. Look up the word's definitions. Also there is a parallax ref somewhere, and I think it was part of a different subtle project. Look into it. Theres also the hayden one and the xever one.

    October Rereads Dump

  • The OM marriage scene should dip into Olivia's interiority -- she doesn't want to do all this, she just wants to be honeyans, but continues because it makes Myrddin happy.

  • Xever talking about the fae coming back and the source ygg falling into the fire should correlate better with what Nimue first says to Valeska.

  • I think Fidela is missing during the Aety vignette when AX takes hosts. No idea what this is -- near the legendary chimerine thing? Look into it. Also Myrddin should refer to her as Fidela, not Fifi nor Queen Fidela. Olivia should stick to Fifi.

  • The Ryden/Qadira/Thelma friendship inserts are terrible. Find another place for them. Or just drop it -- Qadira and Ryden being friends *does* make sense on its own.

  • Naggirps's motivation for freeing the life-branches makes no goddamned sense. I also should have a note for this already. I'm thinking she's causing the single vignette and allowing it to move, and is helping with Qadira and Thelma too. Needs a much better explanation. Her wanting to make the life-branches clearer / easier to manipulate for her makes a certain amount of sense. Also check my explanation on the first draft.

  • On that note, Sutap merging everyone together makes a bit more sense again, if the Naggirps action is unrelated.

  • However, this creates the problem of him essentially doing the same thing three times, with only one of those making him a brother. I could probably work with it, though. Also, there's never an explanation for what he's actually doing -- just needs a few words I think.

    • October 4, 2026
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  • Axetheevery is slipping into present tense. Fix.

    • October 17, 2026
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    I like the idea that smoke messes around with red bolts for a number of reasons but idk how George would know that (smoky mirror refs, boundless fire, and it is just a better handling of that plot hole). There being smoke in Lugus's office might work. Maybe I can correlate smoke or incense with the actions of spy networks or whatever -- look into the mythology there. "Smoke and mirrors" has a bunch of useful secondary meanings, and might make a good chapter title somewhere. Possibly the one where George diea -- 23? Look into it anyway.

    October 31, 2026
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    Barrett's conjecture in 24-B goes nowhere so I need this vignette for a lot less. The large mass of enchanted gryphons is also a plot hole. I think this should ultimately be the focus so I can leave it as is, and then make it make the cairn's council more likely to form -- so perhaps it'll come up later. There's a giant army of red gryphons from two separate processes that B thinks will do *something*, and maybe that's what spearheads Olivia's advance instead. Just needs some work.

    On that note, I can actually patch two plot holes in one -- if the Mausoleans are specifically looking for a large mass of enchanted gryphons then AX can't reclaim the rhizarium, and that ends up being the main reason axe moves elsewhere. At the moment there's three motivations, which is fine, but it weakens the connection between the cairn's council plotline and AX's actions. Maybe the Fae-meal thing is the reason AX goes in the direction that AX does, but it needs to flee because of that plotline. And chimerines are related somehow too.

    November 2, 2026
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    Francis's musings on the Cairn's council supporting his ambitions is now a plot hole. I don't like this paragraph anyway.

    November 8, 2026
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    People are branches of the source ygg while abstract things are boughs instead. Or not. Needs work. A search for "source ygg" and "bough" should work.

    November 9, 2026
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    Make sure all instances of "lone" are paired somehow with roots. Roots doesn't have to be paired the other way, but "lone" has plenty of alternatives.

    November 10, 2026
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    The present tense is a problem with Aety and Naggirps too.

    November 11, 2026
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    Is it "sap and blood" or "blood and sap"?

    November 12, 2026
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    "axiomself" happens before "axiom".

    There is in fact an axiom of self in philosophy, so playing around with it would give "axiomself" a good reason to exist.

    November 13, 2026
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