Myrddin's nectaran experience needs more work early on (I think this is already an editing item but I'm not sure). Comes up again at 10-MO, and much later too.
"Long before she'd be the one sold" should instead change to Myrddin getting multiple nectarans from that village, or just stopping by or whatever, and Myrddin asking about her.
Philipp's feelings towards OM honeying should play some kind of role somewhere. Probably within all the Xever vignettes, which I think is already happening.
Barrett's pre-Vastwood section should tie in better to Myrddin's thoughts on the subject (and nectarans in general I suppose -- depends on what's happening in M and O's POV at the time this occurs). Same deal with hinting towards the danger Jadzia faced (should be hinted at during MO sections as well), which solves that particular problem too.
Migrated: why was Jadzia's journey out this way so perilous? In Barrett/Myrddin's POVs it looks to be uncivilized, followed by villages.
